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Post by Grand Warlock Naarghul on Jun 23, 2008 17:33:07 GMT 12
I'm in a bind.
I'm at an "At point A, must get to point B" area in Time Apart, Time Together. This next chapter is supposed to set up the battle between May and Raolin. To be perfectly honest, I have no idea how to do it. The whole battle between them is choreographed in my head already: I just need to get to it.
Also, to be perfectly honest, most of these first few chapters have been rather fluffy and lighthearted. That stuff is supposed to end with the next chapter. I have that to take into consideration when writing this.
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Post by JbstormburstADV on Jun 24, 2008 3:48:51 GMT 12
Well, if we knew what point A was, I bet we could help
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Post by Grand Warlock Naarghul on Jun 24, 2008 5:31:31 GMT 12
Point A is what you see below in my fic post.
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Post by JbstormburstADV on Jun 24, 2008 9:12:10 GMT 12
Ah... Well, here's a possible set-up, and please bear with me: May asks if she can call Drew and Ash says yes. He answers, and May asks when he'll get to where she is at this rate, to which Drew replies (insert indefinite amount of time). Then, May says goodbye, and Drew hangs up. She then tells Ash that she's ready to tell Brock and Dawn, and they go.
When Ash and May do find them, May expains the whole thing with Raolin and why she left. Dawn then goes all,. "WTF! Raolin's after you!" and explains how she has known about what happened, but not the coordinators involved. May then explains herself for not telling them, and Dawn and Brock forgive her. Then, the group asks if she wants their help in training, and she replies yes. Then we see an example of their training, and the chapter ends, unless you want to add more.
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Post by Grand Warlock Naarghul on Jun 24, 2008 21:49:04 GMT 12
The only issue I see here is that it creates a rather annoying plothole. May has no idea where Drew is at the moment. Max himself wouldn't have been sure, as telling Max where he was hadn't really been the focal point of their conversation.
Also, Raolin has a specific reason that he's going to Sinnoh, and May has very little to do with it. I suppose though, that the crew (Especially May herself) would think that Raolin is after her.
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Post by JbstormburstADV on Jun 25, 2008 3:03:05 GMT 12
But, doesn't a videophone have a sort-of redial feature so you can talk to the people you talked to before, even without knowing the number.
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Post by Grand Warlock Naarghul on Jun 26, 2008 5:11:31 GMT 12
I still see a problem with it. There's supposed to be a few days after Drew makes his call before May makes hers. I like the rest of your idea, and I may just use it (Working on it is another matter, though, as I've got something else I have to take care of first). I guess I could do it that way, and I just had an idea of how to close the chapter as I'm typing this.
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Post by midnightsun63 on Jul 7, 2008 13:42:35 GMT 12
Hi, I need some help on my very first fanfic, I'm doing. I'm not sure how do start off the 5th chapter and I'm looking for some help and I'm starting to get some blank spaces in it where I'm not sure what I'm going to put. This is my fanfic: www.fanfiction.net/s/4367275/1/The_Dark_CrystalSo if you could give me some help, that would be greatly appreciated. please review.
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Post by Nina_Lumos on Oct 22, 2008 2:22:00 GMT 12
I still can't get past my own writer's block, where I'm supposed to write a battle scene. How do you make a battle between a bazooka-wielder and a twin dagger-using thief over a pool of lava interesting?
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Post by MagmarFire on Oct 22, 2008 8:37:10 GMT 12
Sure it's not interesting already? XD
Getting into specific descriptions of the battlefield helps me out a lot. Getting a bit poetic with the characters' conditions, the effect they have on the environment during the course of the battle, etc. also helps me out quite a bit. Would that help?
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Post by Nina_Lumos on Oct 22, 2008 14:30:55 GMT 12
There are several connected square stone platforms held above the lava pool by several strongmen (the lava was non-lethal for some reason, that's how it was in the game I was adapting into my story). The Dodai (what both the platforms and the men holding them are called) can be attacked by either fighter to weaken it, so their opponent has a chance to fall for instant defeat. The entire battle is 1-on-1 between two three-man teams (much like how the tournament battles in Yu Yu Hakusho are fought). The protagonist's team consists of the shapeshifting draconic hero (my story's version of Ash), a princess/apprentice sorceress and future love interest of the hero (you can guess which character this is), and the bazooka-wielding engineer Momo. In the battle, they fight in the reverse order of above. Their opponents are the thief I mentioned earlier, a magician and a swordsman, in that order (just like the game). Thanks in advance for you and anyone else who can help me with this.
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Post by XAOTL on Oct 23, 2008 6:22:01 GMT 12
Here's what James advises for Pokemon battles... different format but should help. Other advice I can give is maybe make the lava deadly, htat would help a bit.
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Post by timoteyo7 on Oct 23, 2008 10:13:31 GMT 12
Yeah I kinda have writers block too.. it's not because of my writing skills... its laziness anyone know how to oevercome it?
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Post by narutoninja44 on Oct 23, 2008 10:59:48 GMT 12
Poscrastination issues? -is queen on procrastination- Just get up and force yourself to do it, you'll eventually get into it and won't want to stop writing. =)
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Post by timoteyo7 on Oct 23, 2008 11:16:30 GMT 12
thanks Sexy
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