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Post by gysahlgirl on Jul 18, 2008 9:24:59 GMT 12
hey gusys tih s is my 1st fic so enjoi!!!!
(oh yea tehre may be some slit contest/pokeshipng but not much dont worrd lol)
one day in the sung shine of johto ash and may wer practive battlng
"PIKACHU USE ION TALE" ash said "SKIITY USE ASSISTTT" ay said back
pikachu hit skittyh but skity coujtfnd w/ thunrd (sp?)
"ok now use"
suddenly a man in geren clothes jumped and picked up ashs pikachu
"who r u?" ash asked
"i am drew!!!!!" the man repldx and then he jupmed on may!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"may uh r mine cum wit me"
"no hepl ash" may yelled but ash was to2 laet he punchd drew and drew fell
"ow whyd u jhit me" drew askg "bcuz i hate uo " ash rpld "okay usx iron tal"
pikachu hit dres and he flew off but in eth shadows was TEAM ROKET!!!!!!!!!!
"aash i love ou" may said "i lov u 2 may" ash said bakc nnd then tehy kised in the sunset
chaptr 2 is comnng soon so pleae r+r!!!!!!!!!1
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Post by thedarkfiddler on Jul 18, 2008 9:27:50 GMT 12
Ummm.... I don't know where to start. How about this: Not to be mean, but it all sucks. You grammar sucks, your spelling sucks, and the execution of the idea sucks.
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Post by narutoninja44 on Jul 18, 2008 9:30:02 GMT 12
Wow, never, NEVER use chat speak for a fic. And also, get a better plot. And know your info. And if this reveiw is longer that your story, then this should be locked.-.-
Wheres XAOTL, or AA? TT.TT I needs them for this problem.
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Post by thedarkfiddler on Jul 18, 2008 9:31:09 GMT 12
I know. Where are they?
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Post by narutoninja44 on Jul 18, 2008 9:32:38 GMT 12
I miss Jb, we actually have a troll.TT.TT
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Post by thedarkfiddler on Jul 18, 2008 9:34:56 GMT 12
We have our first troll? Wow...
I don't count mattattack, because sometimes he said intelegent stuff.
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Post by narutoninja44 on Jul 18, 2008 9:36:07 GMT 12
Yeah, and Jb aint here to sees it. FOR HE LOVE OF GOD WHERE ARE OUR ADMINS!?!?!
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Post by thedarkfiddler on Jul 18, 2008 9:37:29 GMT 12
OH MY GOD! SERIOUS DEJA VU!
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Post by narutoninja44 on Jul 18, 2008 9:38:19 GMT 12
lol, wut?
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Post by thedarkfiddler on Jul 18, 2008 9:41:09 GMT 12
I have experienced this before. And you know what, she makes me think of mattattack. I think he's back somehow.
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Post by narutoninja44 on Jul 18, 2008 9:43:49 GMT 12
O.O...WHERE ARE OIR IP ADDRESS SEERS!?!?!
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Post by thedarkfiddler on Jul 18, 2008 9:44:39 GMT 12
Not here.
OMG, they are so gonna kick themselves for not being here.
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Post by narutoninja44 on Jul 18, 2008 9:45:53 GMT 12
Then they'll be like: We should ask Jb to asign NarutoNinja44 to be a Mod or something. -brickd-
Seriously, they will be kicking themselves.>P
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Post by thedarkfiddler on Jul 18, 2008 9:46:42 GMT 12
I think I deserve it more.... I'm on more.
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Post by narutoninja44 on Jul 18, 2008 9:48:09 GMT 12
I got in trouble a few days back! And plus, our admins arent on twice as long as us usually. (Cept Jb sometimes.>.>)
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